A.O. Avalon

Being as how you're from Manchester, I thought you'd be more of a soccer...er, football fan. Or was that general gloating...you know, the kind Americans never get since we lost ...

I think any country that accepts Sci-Fi and Romance as genres has bad writers. (Which is not to insult any Romance or Sci-fi writers out there, I'm a Sci-fi-er myself, ...

I really like your title, that's what drew me to the poem in the first place. I'm really jealous, this is the poetry I always want to write and can't ...

*sigh*Okay, when I said "Most Americans are b*******" I didn't mean we're all mean, nasty people who deserve to be called foul names. Rather I meant was "Not genuine; spurious" ...

oooh, I was just thinking "shot" would work better, but "knifed" is great! Bravo!

I disagree with some of Winter's edits. In theatrical works, yes you would want to cut out descriptisions--they inhibit the actor. However, in fiction, the only way for the audience ...

AOA was not joking, and she apologizes for being so slow about it, but she's been busy. I think every writer who truly loves their art tries to become published. ...

"While" doesn't work for me, it implies concurrent actions, not cause and effect. The fear disappears because of the parents presence. "Makes" seems too simplistic. Time to pull out the ...

No worries. It was funny, it made me smile (the poem I mean). And as for rhyming...I think you'll find a considerable number of people on this sight who will ...

Boundless was bothering me, at first, but now it sounds right, go figure.

One little thing: Awful weather joins to. "To" should be "too". It could be a little longer. Maybe you could describe why you hate finals? Gala and I have finals ...

Would it BE better, even.

Would the third stanza better as: "Red lips-wax Brown stuble-light beard pressed against a cheek. Fear drifts away." OR "Red lips-wax Brown stuble-light beard pressed against a cheek and fear ...

Make it not suck. And could there be a bit with a dog? (I

Do you remember the day you read this at Quartz? More importantly, do you remember what happened as a result? Ahh, we were but children... Couple of technical things... but ...